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posted by [personal profile] rivers_bend at 10:11am on 04/08/2007 under , , , ,
[livejournal.com profile] merihn wrote a Sam/Dean kissing fic here. [livejournal.com profile] flawedamythyst wanted a Dean's POV to it. [livejournal.com profile] merihn didn't want to write it, so I asked if I could. I'm supposed to be writing a fic of my own, but the angst was killing me, and I wanted a little diversion. so anyway, here it is.

Sam/Dean. Adult rated for sexual talk. ~950 words.


Sam had been a pissy bitch for weeks, and Dean was getting sick of it. Sure, they were fucking, and it was better than Dean had ever imagined –which, given all he'd imagined over the years was amazing in itself- but it wasn't like they were going steady. Sam'd started to get all grabby-hands and kissy-face in public though, which, just, no.

For one, they were brothers. Not that Dean had ever been all that concerned with fitting in, but on the scale of things he didn't exactly want to get caught doing, that was pretty close to the top. And, ok, it wasn't like they were twins or anything, and if they kept quiet and kept it away from the people that knew them, probably no one would know about the brother thing. But there was also… well… It's not like they were in San Francisco or something. You drive an Impala, listen to metal, have a way with the girls the way Dean did… It kinda ruined a guy's reputation to start sucking face with a dude over the peach cobbler.

Dean tried being extra attentive when they were alone, pushing Sam up against any handy wall, begging Sam to fuck him, even getting up first one morning and going to get the coffee, but that just didn't seem to work. Dean thought it might work if he felt Sam up in the car, and it did, but Sam seemed to take that as license to try and grope Dean's ass when they stopped for gas, so that was out too.

Then Sam stopped moaning when Dean sucked his cock, just lay there like he was watching TV or something. All because Dean didn’t feel like he should have to explain the whole not in San Francisco thing. Hello? It was pretty obvious.

Dean wasn't having it. Because amazing orgasms apart, the look on Sam's face and the noises he made when Dean touched him or kissed him, were the best thing about the whole fucking his brother thing. There had to be something Dean could do.

*****


The diner was off the beaten track, but crowded, probably because the food was really good. Sam was doing the sulking thing while he ate, so Dean figured he would take a look through Dad's journal, see if he could find the list of symbols he'd remembered seeing a few months back. Dad was meticulous about writing shit down, but the book wasn't exactly indexed and cross referenced.

A squeal from Sam's chair made Dean look up. As if he didn’t take up enough space just sitting there, the boy had decided to sprawl. And damn, if he didn't look good enough to eat. He had to be doing it on purpose, no one could look that good without trying. Dean felt himself licking his lips as though they were back in their room, no one watching, and Dean could do whatever he wanted.

Which made him wonder what he was really worried about. Really, if you thought about it, he could do whatever he wanted right here. What the hell did he care about a bunch of folks from… Where the hell even were they? Added bonus? It would make Sam's day, and he'd maybe stop being Mr Emo. Not that he needed to rush into anything. Dean was pretty much a jump in with both feet kind of guy, but some things were worth anticipating a little. Besides. It would never do to let Sam think he was irresistible.

Dean went back to the journal for a while as Sam pretended to ignore him, staring out the window at the clouds or something. He could feel Sam's eyes flitting to his lips, so he made sure to shape the words with his mouth, knowing Sam wouldn’t be able to help thinking about what other uses Dean could put it to. After a few minutes, Sam turned even further and pointedly kept his gaze from Dean. The sun coming in on the stretch of his neck drove away all Dean's ability to read, and he started saying things like, 'I'm going to take you back to the room and pull all your clothes off and then I'm going to hold you down and lick you everywhere until you're begging me to fuck you,' instead of whatever crap about church hauntings he had been looking at. Sam didn't even notice.

Dean knew a sure-fire way to get his attention though.

He didn't mean for his chair to make that noise, but Sam continued to ignore him, so Dean still had the element of surprise. Sam's pose made his lap a perfect target for Dean's ass. Relishing the look of surprise on his brother's face, Dean shimmied his hips forwards 'til he could feel Sam's cock against his fly. Dean could feel eyes on the back of his neck, but he pretended he and Sam were the only two in the room, cupping Sam's face and kissing him.

Maybe the whole doing it with the lights out thing was overrated. Because this? Was hot. Sam had some kind of buzzing energy going on that was different from even the times when he'd moan Dean's name and clench his fingers so tight around Dean's shoulders he left bruises. When Dean started to wonder just how long they'd have to sit in jail if he put a hand in Sam's jeans and pulled him off right here in the diner, and if it would be worth it, he figured it was time to stop. He'd proved his point, anyway.

Sam didn't say a word, but he could hardly walk as he headed for the bathroom.
Music:: A Fine Frenzy
Mood:: 'horny' horny
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posted by [identity profile] littledrop.livejournal.com at 05:34pm on 04/08/2007
I LOVE IT. You have Dean so perfect! Because he would so be worried about the not in San Francisco thing EVEN THOUGH he is a big big badass who could kill people with his little finger if he wanted to. So really he is just shy. And sweet with it, too!

I'm glad he didn't jerk Sam off in the diner, though, because spunk in a public eating place is kind of icky. And Sam hardly being able to walk is much more fun. Heh, maybe he won't complain so much in the future. *g*
 
posted by [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com at 05:38pm on 04/08/2007
yay! I'm glad you like. And I can see Dean arguing that he's not queer, just because he's taking it up the arse from his brother, it doesn't make him a bum-boy... :D

I think even Dean would draw the line at adding that sort of cream to his pie in a public place. At least I hope he would. Because... ewwwwww
 
posted by [identity profile] lima-sierra.livejournal.com at 07:06pm on 04/08/2007
YAY! This was absolutely perfectly Dean, totally inside his head, hearing his voice, just what I image he'd be like kinda Dean. Sam had been a pissy bitch ... - that just cracked me up completely. Love how you crowbarred a little bit of home in there too. *g* How Dean can be so shy yet so not shy at the same time is so endearing. LOVE this. Funny and hot and well written and pitch perfect. Love all your SPN fic in fact. I'm so glad you're writing it! Oh, and icon luv.
 
posted by [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com at 07:18pm on 04/08/2007
speaking of eyeliner icon love...

I hope it's the Dean Alex was writing when she wrote her Sam POV fic. I do love his little running commentaries in his head. There are others who do him better, I think, but he is damn fun. I'm glad you like!
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posted by [identity profile] merihn.livejournal.com at 11:43pm on 04/08/2007
BOUNCY CLAPPY OMGYAY!!!!!

Wheee! That was AWESOME, honey. I love you SO much for writing it. It was SO DEAN. *tackles you*
See, you did it so much better than I could have. I was really wrapped up in how Sam saw it, so Dean's POV would have been too much like Sam, I think.

I LOVE YOU!!!
 
posted by [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com at 12:54am on 05/08/2007
I am so relieved I can't even tell you. Because I wasn't sure if my dean was the Dean you were thinking of when you wrote Sam's part... But yay, you like it!

Dean talks to me a lot more than Sam does, so I almost always get to hear what he's thinking about things when I read Sam POV fics. And I do like taking what someone else has written and seeing what the other person has to say about it.

So thank you for letting me at it!

*smishes you lots and lots*

 
posted by [identity profile] blueluthien.livejournal.com at 12:02am on 05/08/2007
Everything you write is amazing.

This is just another example.

HOT!
 
posted by [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com at 12:55am on 05/08/2007
Thank you so much! *is grinning gleefully*

*is also mesmerised by your icon*
 
posted by [identity profile] fromyourashes.livejournal.com at 01:42am on 05/08/2007
gosh, sweetie, you're kinda making me fangirl you.


stop it.
 
posted by [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com at 01:45am on 05/08/2007
*blushes*

Sorry. It's just the boys won't stop talking to me! There will be more soon, I'm afraid...
 
posted by [identity profile] dc-longwing.livejournal.com at 02:10am on 05/08/2007
LOVED this! What a great companion piece to merihn's! I was nodding my head as I read it -- your Dean is TOTALLY that guy.
Thanks so much,
DC
 
posted by [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com at 02:16am on 05/08/2007
Thank you! It's always good to hear that it works as a companion piece when I do that. Because that's what I worry most about. This is a little bit different Dean than the one I usually write, but he seemed to work with the situation.

You are very welcome!
 
posted by [identity profile] fpvs.livejournal.com at 02:34am on 05/08/2007
Mmmm... Wonderful... But you know...

'I'm going to take you back to the room and pull all your clothes off and then I'm going to hold you down and lick you everywhere until you're begging me to fuck you,'
.... It kinda makes me think there's a sequel.

And yeah, *rolls eyes* I know it doesn't need a sequel or whatever... But really... Serves you right for writing the above! *nods*
 
posted by [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com at 03:23am on 05/08/2007
I'm only just now finishing part three of my long six part fic. And those sequels have top priority :) Though if the next bit turns out half as angsty as this bit, i might need a porny diversion... You just never know.

I'm glad you liked this bit at any rate. :D
 
posted by [identity profile] soxykitty.livejournal.com at 05:40am on 05/08/2007
Oh Dean how I heart you!
 
posted by [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com at 02:15pm on 05/08/2007
he is eminently heartable, tis true.

*strokes icon*
 
posted by [identity profile] timdvosk.livejournal.com at 05:41am on 05/08/2007
That rocked, I loved it.
 
posted by [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com at 02:15pm on 05/08/2007
Thank you! I'm glad it worked for you.
 
posted by [identity profile] victorian-tweed.livejournal.com at 12:04pm on 05/08/2007
Holymotheroffuck River!! And I mean that in the best possible way!!




 
posted by [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com at 02:16pm on 05/08/2007
*giggles*

Thank you, kind lady.
 
posted by [identity profile] flawedamythyst.livejournal.com at 12:56pm on 05/08/2007
OMG OMG OMG YAY! THIS IS PERFECT!! YAY!!

*flails*

Thank you so much!

Oh, DEAN...*happy sigh* This is SO him...and Sam is SUCH a pissy bitch and Dean is AWESOME and...YAY! *flails more*

*loves*
 
posted by [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com at 02:18pm on 05/08/2007
*wipes brow*

I'm so glad you like! It's always a bit nerve wracking when you are trying to write a character in a way to make others happy. I'm glad I got his voice right.

*does happy dance*
 
posted by [identity profile] willa-writes.livejournal.com at 05:33pm on 05/08/2007
Sweet mercy, that's hot. Great Dean voice -- I'm not an expert, but that "sounds" like him to me.

*friends you*

*also uses interestingly appropriate icon*
 
posted by [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com at 05:40pm on 05/08/2007
Why hello! and welcome! We seem to have much in common :) *friends back*

I am crazy about your icon. and it is brilliantly appropriate.

I think one of the reasons I love Dean so much is he has a great voice. He can be kind of doofus guy or smart about things.
 
posted by (anonymous) at 04:24am on 07/08/2007
Aw, yeah, THAT'S the stuff. Came here by way of merihn, and I'm glad I did. You have Dean down to a T, truly. And it's delicious from his POV. God, I can hear his mental voice in my own head. Awesome!
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posted by [personal profile] sylvanwitch at 04:25am on 07/08/2007
Uh...oh, yeah, I logged in this time. The above comment is mine. Hope you don't mind if I friend you.
 
posted by [identity profile] subtly-modded.livejournal.com at 11:27pm on 19/09/2007
Yup, you guessed it, I'm readin' through your fic. Thanks for the sticky post!

Again, great great characterization.

Digging all the Ani DiFranco references. It's puttin' a good musical/moody backdrop to things.
 
posted by [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com at 11:32pm on 19/09/2007
that sticky post seriously took like six hours to do, but I always love when other people have them, so I thought it would be worth it. And I'm so grinning hugely that someone actually gets the Ani references.

I liked doing this one, cos it wasn't really 'my' Sam and Dean, so it was kind of fun to play with what [livejournal.com profile] merihn had done. I'm glad you're reading, thank you!
 
posted by [identity profile] rasah.livejournal.com at 08:24pm on 09/09/2008
PERFECT Dean voice!
 
posted by [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com at 04:16pm on 24/07/2009
so I am like a year late with this feedback, which is horrifying to me, and I am so sorry, but thank you so much! :D
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posted by [identity profile] maerhys.livejournal.com at 11:15pm on 17/12/2008
I never figured a ficlet about a KISS would be so damn HOT. *fans self* Your Dean is so spot-on.
 
posted by [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com at 04:17pm on 24/07/2009
I do not understand how I had TWO unanswered comments on this fic. I'm so so sorry!

But thank you so much; I am so glad you liked it!
 
posted by [identity profile] fayedoll.livejournal.com at 12:48pm on 24/07/2009
Funny and hot. Your Dean is awesome! XD You had me at the first sentence and then I just couldn't stiffle my giggles about the "Mr.Emo" part. ♥
 
posted by [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com at 04:17pm on 24/07/2009
Thank you! I am so glad you liked!
 
posted by [identity profile] fayedoll.livejournal.com at 12:34pm on 14/08/2010
you've been rec'ed @ crack_impalal (http://community.livejournal.com/crack_impala/296453.html) ♥
 
posted by [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com at 01:21pm on 14/08/2010
Thank you so much :D
 
posted by [identity profile] viciousbluesky.livejournal.com at 02:01pm on 14/08/2010
I adored this.
 
posted by [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com at 02:25pm on 14/08/2010
I'm so glad! Thank you :D :D
 
posted by [identity profile] carafyre.livejournal.com at 06:11pm on 16/11/2010
Hot Winchester kisses are a great way to start the day. Love it.
 
posted by [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com at 04:07am on 19/11/2010
that they are. Thanks!
 
posted by [identity profile] marchia43.livejournal.com at 06:41pm on 09/12/2010
HI
Just read this and thought it is really well written, Dean's POV is great!
Thanks
M
 
posted by [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com at 07:52pm on 09/12/2010
You are welcome :D Thank you so much for reading!
 
posted by [identity profile] masja-17.livejournal.com at 07:46pm on 05/02/2012
Yay! Hard to walk.. *giggles*

Hot as usual!

<3

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